*Pitch*

[RydCook]

patrickcoyle said:

admin said:

Yes.. that and drugs! That always makes me groan. ;D

Let's not forget the "waking up to an alarm clock" opening!

ha ha yeah. When i worked at a sixth form a good 45% of the films started with an alarm clock and someone getting up.

WHY IS THIS?!

[salvador]

Yeah I know suicide is shit in films and I hate all those stupid student films that have it.

The pitch aint coming across right, so I know I have a problem.

[Gareth]

hhahahahaahahha check out this site, it's a list of all the worst culprits e.g.

There's nothing INHERENTLY wrong with starting a film with the buzz of an alarm clock, a hand slapping the snooze button, eyes fluttering open, followed by a yawn or an "oh my god, I'm late!" - But why so much of this? We see it all the time. It's as if the writer/director woke up one morning, looked around and said "Wow. This is cool!" Uh yeah. Better go back to sleep.

filmmaker.com/DUMPS.html

[inny]

who ever dies first wins, reminds me of monty pythons death squad, or the motto for the irish s.a.s, only joshin what do i know??

[inny]

B****x i used that to start a chapter in one of my books the alarm clock thing an never was a student, i'm way too dumb fer that mallarchy bugger it back to the drawin board lol

[salvador]

UPDATE:

Here is the finished logline..

A teenager struggles to leave her group of friends after their orgy of drink and drugs leads to death.

Thanks for your help guys!